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July 25, 2007 by Jane

What do you think of this sentence to start a chapter:

“I met my future ex-husband at the wedding of my sister to her future ex-husband.”

Mouthful? Hmm.

I kinda like it.

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  1. on July 26, 2007 at 4:43 pm goingferal

    As a chapter start, not bad. I feel kind of like I’ve heard it before, or heard the “I met my future ex” part before–maybe in some short stories I was reading last weekend. But as a chapter start, that bothers me less than as a book start.


    • on July 26, 2007 at 4:58 pm janechurch

      I’ll play with it. I think it may sound too busy though. But those are two things I want to get right out there — that this character and her sister are both divorced.



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